Here's what I found reviewing part 1 of the handbook. Some of these issues are just "things that don't sound good to me" but as I'm not a native english speaker, I may be wrong. 2.a - Introduction - 1 para > succesfully < successfully 2.b - Gentoo KDE/Gnome LiveCD - 1 para < does not contain GRP, distfiles, nor a portage snapshot > does not contain GRP, source code, nor a portage snapshot [the word "distfiles" was never used before and can cause confusion] 2.c - Booting the HPPA LiveCD(s) - 7 para < When the boot is succesful, > When the boot is successful, 3.d - Code listing 12 < we load the pcnet32 kernel > we load the pcnet32 module 3.d - Code listing 13 < succesfull > successful 3.d - Understanding Network Terminology - 4 para < As is usual, the netmask > As usual, the netmask 4.a - Partitions - 2 para < A primary partition is a partition of which the information is stored in the MBR > A primary partition is a partition which has its information stored in the MBR 4.a - Partitions - 3 para < but as four partitions is too little, it is brought to life > but as four partitions were too few, it was brought to life 4.a - Partitions - 3 para < without loosing backwards compatibility. > without losing backward compatibility. 4.b - How Many and How Big? - 1 para < security and makes backups more easy > security and makes backups easier 4.i - Initialising the Partitions - 1 para < you first need activate LVM > you first need to activate LVM 4.i - Set up the Volume Group - 1 para < where these devices files are located > where these device files are located 4.j - Introduction - 1 para < with what we use default in this handbook > with what we use as default in this handbook 4.k - Code listing 48 < Bind-mounting proc and dev > Bind-mounting proc 5.a - 4 para < you have to choose for the alternative option > you have to choose the alternative option 5.b - Downloading the Stage Tarball - 2 para < For there on you should see > There you should see 6.a - Optional: Selecting Mirrors - 1 para < If you are booted > If you have booted 6.a - Optional: Selecting Mirrors - 1 para < for both Portage as source code > for both Portage and source code 6.a - Copy DNS Info - 1 para < and that is copy over the DNS information > that is copying over the DNS information 6.a - Configuring the USE variable - 2 para < you can define with what options a package should be compiled with > you can define what options a package should be compiled with 8.b - Creating /etc/fstab - 1 para < /etc/fstab uses a special syntaxis > /etc/fstab uses a special syntax 8.b - Creating /etc/fstab - 1 para < The sixth field is used by fsck the order > The sixth field is used by fsck to determine the order 8.b - Creating /etc/fstab - 3 para < Lets take a look at how we write down > Let us take a look at how we write down 8.c - Configuring your Network - 6 para < So lets give two examples > So let us give two examples 9.b - Understanding GRUB's terminology - 3 para < and who are a little lost in the GRUB numbering scheme. > and that are a little lost in the GRUB numbering scheme. 9.b - Code listing 5 < Which listing to boot default > Which listing to boot as default 9.h - Alternative: Manual yaBoot Configuration - 3 para < Once yaboot.conf is set up how you want it > Once yaboot.conf is set up the way you want it 10.a - 1 para < system tools of which we cannot provide > system tools for which we cannot provide 10.a - 1 para < We also said that the we would install > We also said that we would install 10.a - 4 para < use syslog-ng as it is very powerfull > use syslog-ng as it is very powerful 10.b - 2 para < is similar with installing a system logger > is similar to installing a system logger 10.b - Note < using the prebuild packages > using the precompiled packages ["prebuilt" should be the correct word, but I like more "precompiled". If you're interested, "prebuilt" is also in 2.a-Architectures, 7.a-Choosing a Kernel (2 times), 11.b (near the end)] 11.b - Optional: Install Extra Packages - 2 para < copy over the prebuild binaries > copy over the precompiled binaries 11.b - Optional: Install Extra Packages - 3 para < copy over all prebuild binaries > copy over all precompiled binaries 11.b - Code listing 8 < Copy over prebuild binaries > Copy over precompiled binaries 11.b - Optional: Install Extra Packages - 4 para < CD-2 contains several prebuild binaries > CD-2 contains several precompiled binaries
Thanks. I've fixed most of them in CVS so they should show up within the next hour. I kept the prebuilt as compiling is only a small step of the building process. I did fix prebuild->prebuilt though. I believe the only thing I didn't change was < and who are a little lost in the GRUB numbering scheme. > and that are a little lost in the GRUB numbering scheme. as the "who" is about the users, not the disks/partitions. I'm not 100% confident if the right way is "the users who" or "the users that", so I've kept it as is. Thanks for the feedback!
Wow, that was fast. Thanks a lot, part 2 now...
